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John Lovie's avatar

Ah, I love this. I'm there, completely drawn into that world.

Mike Murphy's avatar

Ah… the “I’ve already chosen you,” line was powerful to me. Sometimes we just know, and sometimes we just worry way too much. But when we get it right, it’s always good!

Kirie Pedersen's avatar

Thanks for reading and commenting, Mike! I love the feedback!

Allegra B McFarland's avatar

Well, Auntie Bob was right. This is a beautiful piece, full of glowing detail that makes sense of the environment and even helps the reader to see and understand the characters. Nice work!

Kirie Pedersen's avatar

Thanks, Allegra!

Christiana White's avatar

Wow. One of the most unusual pieces I’ve read. So much that is unfamiliar here! Thank you for letting me occupy this world for a beat.

Kirie Pedersen's avatar

Thanks so much for your response, Christiana! Glad you occupied this world! And I love what you say on your own site, that you, "like most of us, [are] fumbling toward some sort of grace."

John Lovie's avatar

And I love that hover coyote, hanging in the air in exactly the way Wile E. Coyote doesn't.

Kirie Pedersen's avatar

Thanks, John! The story even has water in it!